now, that ending I wasn't expecting. wow. very powerful story. i have to say, my gut was clenching when she was in the hospital and losing herself, el losing himself. i can see how the lines between 'cop' and the undercover personality could get so blurred.

Elliot hit Maureen when she was a baby... Because Elliot is a character, everything about him exists in LAO SVU, and people love that show because of the characters. You have to be careful not to change who he is. Elliot isn't perfect- just almost... and that makes him so much more interesting.

I freaking LOVE how you ended this. Your writing just keeps getting better and better. The makeup foundation metaphor was seamless and worked really really well.

The best part of this story? In the last chapter when they took Daniel down as a team. I love that he was there for her long enough for her to regain enough of herself to then take him down. I was sitting here going, "YAAAAAY!!!!"

And I do love it when you explore the dark side of things, push the envelope just enough to be incredibly insightful, AND then end it with something hopeful. Elliot coming back to her apt here was awesome; the fact that that part reads very quickly makes their getting together seem that much more natural and right. Nice job. And Grace... she was like barely there in this story, but seemed very real. Keep it up! You're just getting better. And, again, sorry I disappeared for a few weeks. It really was just that nuts around here. Ok, off to read your new fic... YAY. :)

Ok, first off, let me apologize for disappearing. School got WAY too fucking busy to even read, let alone review anything on this site. But things have finally slowed down a little, so I'm back. :) And I'll give you a more complete review at the end of this story, but for this chapter, let me say this:

I love your description of the molecules in the air freezing. I think that's the best description I've ever read of one of those moments where something so powerful happens that everything else temporarily fades away and seems to stop. That was a terrific description. I'm a little scared about the next chapter, but here goes...

So I'm finally here to review. Its taken me forever and I apologize. I have loved reading this. What I love most about your writing is you are so different from everyone else. Its never E loves O. E and O live happily ever after. haha its never like that. You come up with these amazing story lines that always manage to work. You captured Olivia really well in this particular fic. She has been through hell in back.

I think my favorite line in this fic was "Keep your eyes open, Elliot. I can't do another Sealview." LOVE that line. It was so powerful and stayed with you throughout the entire story. You felt her emotions. I found myself reading and thinking about this one line. I was ready to beat Elliot down if he fucked up ;) Seriously in love with this line. Its something I could see her saying on the show. Maybe something she needs to say...

It's meant to be funny. It's meant to be a joke but jokes seem to get swallowed in here, Olivia's noticed. In here it is all grey and the jokes have no humor and the air has no life. >>> Its all grey and the jokes have no humor. That line sets the tone for the whole story. It provides a great visual that really sets the tone for the reader.

"The Marines," she begins. "Was that like this?">>> love this. Its a distraction for her to get him to talk. Having him tell stories and talk to her is what she needs at this moment.

Olivia likes the moments of color they have after that. It's like her chance for music throughout the day, her chance not to be so fucked up and Elliot has always made her so happy.>>>This is brutally honest. Its so so true. He is the one constant thing in her life.

 "You're looking at me like she used to," Sarah accuses then, her voice almost childlike. "Stop that.">>> I love the character of Sarah.

But glass cuts. Slices Sarah's neck wide open and the red pours out, down her shirt, down her chest. It's dark, the blood. Olivia thinks she must've hit an artery.>>So sad. I was hoping

it wouldn't come to this but at the same time its such a tragic character.

 Olivia has been fighting all her fucking life.
 so she just... gives up. >>> This really stuck out to me. I don't know how I feel. Olivia is one tough bitch who fights until the end but at the same time maybe I can see her giving in. I think eventually it has to be too much. Make sense lol

and yanks for the continued and lovely feedback---- Holler to my first shout out <3

For a while, Grace doesn't say anything. It's quiet with the swirling dust, the wind, and the distance of the rest of the world from this one moment. It is quiet. But then, through the wires something sparks. "What else did my mom say?" love the visual here

At 3am, Olivia shuts her cell phone and c*urls herself against Elliot's warm body, eyes closing as his arms circle her waist. Love the ending! Such a tragic story that came together beautifully at the end.

Fantastic! Really enjoyed this story and was eagerly awaiting the updates, I love that the last line answered every single one of my questions! I love your stories and can't wiat for the next one.